You Should Have

WIDE SHOT (FRONTAL)

Car comes driving down a long road.

MEDIUM SHOT (FRONTAL)

There is a man behind the wheel and a woman in the passenger seat, tapping away on her mobile phone.

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The tire is flat (still flopping around until the car stops)

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MAN

Shit…

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WOMAN

What is it?

MEDIUM SHOT (FRONTAL)

MAN

I think we’ve got a flat tire.

 WOMAN

I told you you should have had winter tires put on. That would have spared these summer tires and we wouldn’t have a flat tire now.

MEDIUM SHOT (SIDE SHOT)

Woman winds window down and looks at tire.

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WOMAN

Yep.

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Man stops engine, puts keys in pocket.

WIDE SHOT (FRONTAL)

He gets out of the car, walks around and looks at the flat tire. Sighs.

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MAN

Ah great, a flat tire!

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WOMAN

I just told you so.

WIDE SHOT (FROM BACK)

Man goes to the back of the car and gets stuff out of the back of the car so he can get the spare tire and tool kit out.

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM FRONT)

MAN

Fucking junk in this car…

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WOMAN

You should have taken it to the tip when I told you to do so.

MEDIUM SHOT(S) (FROM FRONT/SIDE)

Man grumbles, continues to take stuff out of car. Puts kit next to flat tire and goes back to the back of the car to get spare tire out. When he gets up again he notices that his pants are dirty.

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Shot of dirty pants.

MAN

Fuck!

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM FRONT)

Man trying to wipe it off.

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MAN

Now I’ve got dirt all over my trousers…

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WOMAN

You shouldn’t have worn those to my parents place. They’re not posh people, so you don’t have to overdress to rub it in that you earn more than my father does.

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM SIDE)

Man ignores woman, places spare tire upright to the passenger car door, starts jacking up the car. When car is up he tries to get the bolts off, but the wheel keeps spinning.

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MAN

Fuck, fuck, fuck!

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM SIDE)

Woman opens passenger door, spare tire rolls into ditch.

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Tire rolls into ditch and settles there.

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM SIDE)

Woman only puts one foot on ground. Man stands up.

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MAN

Oh great! What did you do that for?

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WOMAN

I wanted to know what you were doing. You should have put the tire down flat, then it wouldn’t have rolled away.

WIDE SHOT

Man gets spare tire out of ditch. Woman half stands up from seat and looks at tire.

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Man tries to get tire out of ditch.

MAN

Fucking hell, there’s nettles here.

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM SIDE)

WOMAN

You should have unbolted the nuts when the weight of the car was still on it.

Woman sits back in car again. Man puts spare tire flat on ground. Man lets down car again, unbolts nuts, jacks car up again.

WIDE SHOT (ANGLED)

While he is doing this a car drives up and stops.

MEDIUM SHOT

Driver winds window down.

CAR DRIVER

Got a flat tire?

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MAN

Yeah, I have.

MEDIUM SHOT

CAR DRIVER

Do you need a hand?

WIDE SHOT (FROM FRONT, WITH BOTH CARS AND MAN IN VIEW)

MAN

No, I’m fine. Thanks mate.

CAR DRIVER

Okay, take care.

WIDE SHOT (ANGLED, FROM BACK OF ‘STRANDED’ CAR)

Car drives away from ‘stranded’ car.

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WOMAN

You should have said you were pissing against your tire like a dog. Would have been a lot funnier.

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MAN

(mumbles) It’s not funny in the first place.

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WOMAN

We should have been at Jean’s place already.

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MAN

(mumbles) I should have been at the pub with my mates.

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM SIDE)

WOMAN

What was that?

MAN

Nothing.

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WOMAN

You should speak up if you want to say something or shut the fuck up.

WIDE SHOT (FROM SIDE)

Man replaces tire and puts flat tire in the back of the car. Gets tools and is putting them back in the car.

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM FRONT)

Man stands with spanner (or something like that) in hand and looks at it thoughtfully.

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Spanner in hand of man.

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM FRONT)

Man looks at woman.

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Woman is still tapping away on her phone.

WOMAN

I’ve just texted Jean that we’re late. She just said that we should have been there fifteen minutes ago.

Screen goes black for a few seconds.

MEDIUM SHOT (FROM SIDE)

Man shuts trunk and wipes hands on tissue paper, throws away tissue paper.

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Camera follows tissue (and shows blood on tissue).

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Man sits back in driver’s seat again.

MAN

What was that? Yeah, you should have kept your mouth shut!

Man smiles, starts car.

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Woman is seen sitting in passenger seat, mouth open, spanner sticking out of her mouth. There are blood splatters on her face and blood dripping from her mouth.

CLOSE UP (ANGLED)

Man is driving away, relaxed smile on his face.

WIDE SHOT (FROM PARKED LOCATION)

Car drives off into the distance.

 

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